sexta-feira, 4 de outubro de 2013

Two Voice Poem -- The Reflection



Voice 1:  Karara
Both
Voice 2:  Eric  #
Maha, why don’t you treat me well?
You aren’t a very good
Mother!
Can you please go away?
“From the day you came out as a girl
and not a boy, you have been a burden.”
(page 85)  Just because I’m a girl, doesn’t
 mean I’m worthless!
Why do you always think it’s me, just
 because I’m a boy!  April broke that plate!
“Karara, weave the wah-pu into baskets,
crush up the ay-ah-e-yah一the men need
 more for fishing tomorrow一and watch
your sister.  I’m taking Luka to the forest.”
 (page 38) Maha throws words and chores
and tasks galore at me, like I was a worthless slave.
“Get your dress shirt, your vest, your 
dress pants, your church shoes, your 
black pants, a belt.”  I have to 
get all that fancy clothes that I hate, 
and Heather and April just slip on a 
dress that they would wear every 
second of their whole lives anyway.
Time is frozen for me, trapped in
a huge loop of chores and tasks.
An endless pause that will never
stop until Luka passes his test.
I climb out of the back seat 
to get out and my mom yells “Hey!!
  Let your sisters out first!”, like the world
 would implode if I didn’t
Why does it matter that I am a
girl?
boy?
That doesn’t mean I’m any less
important.
free.
Because you know what?
We deserve equality because we are humans all the same.





In writing the Two Voice Poem, I had to make a poem that compares my life to Karara's life (from Bringing the Boy Home.  The learning targets I tried to aim for were:
  • I can write a poem that compares two perspectives
  • I can use specific and relevant evidence from the text in my writing
  • I can use figurative language and descriptions in my writing to create vivid pictures in my readers mind
I think that I met the first learning target, because I think I explained the differences between myself and Karara decently.I don't think I got the 3rd reading target, because a) No one has read it yet so I can't know what picture it paints, and b) I am not so great at writing poems.  Well, I was.  I used to not be able to do figurative language so well.  My similes and metaphors made no sense whatsoever.  But, after making this poem, I improved a bit in writing poems.I partly achieved the third learning target because I only used one quote, and only explained what Karara's life is like, not why.

I have only made a few poems before this in 5th or 4th grade.  I think That I might write some again on a day with no school, maybe a random day on vacation to show my parents/grandparents or something.


I think I did well on my use of figurative language in this poem.  I think my best use of figurative language is "Time is frozen for me, trapped in a huge loop of chores and tasks.  An endless pause that will never stop until Luka passes his test.", because that's three metaphors in 2 sentences, and they all make sense. I also think that I did good at comparing Karara and I. I used 2 quotes from the book, which made there be evidence, supporting my comparison.

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